Patient in the Train

A patient of patience,

Waiting to unravel the future,

Scared of opening the wrapper of fate,

Waiting for the train,

The train that kisses

Everything in the rain.

 

 

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One Comment

  1. Nice play on words. I like the repetition throughout the poem too. I think the poem would benefit without the comma in the 5th line, and I think there is a better word for your idea than “caress.” Perhaps “touches” or “presses?”

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